Winter Lights

11 Dec

This week, Susanna Leonard Hill is hosting a holiday writing contest on her blog. The rules dictate that the story be about a holiday (Christmas, Hanukkah, or Kwanaza) mishap, mix-up, miscommunication, mistake, or potential disaster not to exceed 350 words.

You can read more details about the contest at

http://susannahill.blogspot.com/2013/12/ho-ho-ho-3rd-annual-holiday-writing.html

I’ve already read some really amazing stories submitted this week, but I’m going to see what my little holiday gem brings.  I’m taking a chance by not mentioning the holidays in my 346 word story, thereby allowing the reader to make inferences through the text.  That being said, I’m having trouble giving my little story a title.  After you read it, I would love to get some title suggestions from my astute readers.

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Winter Lights

by Juliana Lee

Nico brushed the snowflakes off his shoulders.

Picking up his bundle, he hurried toward the barn.

Meow, Meow, Meow

The sound came through the icy air.

Meow, Meow, Meow

Nico’s whiskers trembled.

Meow, Meow

There near the holly bushes, Nico saw a large ball of fur shivering.

A tail twitched.  A head poked up.  Then two.  Then three.

How many were there? Nico wondered.

Meow, Meow, Meow

Nico stepped forward.

Meow, Meow, Meow

“Follow me,” he said.  “You can stay in the barn tonight.

Meow, Meow

Nico started off.

Eight kittens tumbled after him ears over tails.

Cow gave them fresh milk.

Meow, Meow, Meow

Donkey gave them dry straw.

Meow, Meow, Meow

Sheep gave them soft wool.

Meow, Meow

Nico searched the starless sky.

He saw only one light, shining in a window.

In the morning, the world was painted white.

Meow, Meow, Meow

The snow continued to fall.

Meow, Meow, Meow

Nico strung berries and leaves together.

Meow, Meow

The second night Nico searched the cloudy sky again.

He saw two lights shining in the window.

The snow continued to fall.

Meow, Meow, Meow

The world outside looked like a snow globe.

Meow, Meow, Meow

The barn was warm and smelled of evergreen.

Meow, Meow

Every evening Nico searched the dark sky.

Every evening Nico saw one more light shining in the window.

The snow drifted against the barn.

Meow, Meow, Meow

Nico mixed seeds and nuts.

Meow, Meow, Meow

The kittens played with thistle ornaments.

Meow, Meow

On the eighth night the snow stopped.

The moonlight reflected the snowy world.

Nico led the kittens out of the barn.

Meow, Meow, Meow

A ribbon of kittens trailed through the snow.

Meow, Meow, Meow

Tiny paw prints marked their path.

Meow, Meow

Nico counted eight candles in the window.

The light glistened on the frosted pane.

“What have we here?”

Meow, Meow, Meow

“A gift for a lonely old woman!”

Meow, Meow, Meow

“Come in, Come in.  You must be freezing!”

Meow, Meow

Nico saw the star in the sky.

It was a good night.

47 Responses to “Winter Lights”

  1. juliekrantz at 3:55 PM #

    Nice to meet you, too, Juliana!

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    • Juliana Lee at 4:01 PM #

      Hi Julie! So happy you found your way over here! I’m sure I’ll be seeing more of you this year!

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  2. Oh wow, what a great job, Juliana, with fantastic imagery. The repetition is so important to the kidlets. Excellent! Good luck!

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  3. Cecilia at 8:27 AM #

    how lovely. a string of kittens and a sky full of stars. I could imagine the snow. lovely word pictures.

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    • Juliana Lee at 9:05 AM #

      Thank you so much Cecilia! Hope you’re having such nice nights in your area!

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  4. julie rowan zoch at 8:42 AM #

    Sweet ‘ribbon of kittens’! Good luck, Juliana

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  5. A magical story to reflect the magic of the season. Enchanting!

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  6. This is adorable, Juliana! I love cats/kittens so you had me from the start! Nice job 🙂

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  7. Joanne Sher at 9:31 PM #

    Just lovely. Love the imagery!

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    • Juliana Lee at 9:40 PM #

      Thank you Joanne! So happy I’ve gotten to know you through PiBoIdMo. It’s been so much fun!

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  8. Susanna Leonard Hill at 9:20 PM #

    Lovely original story, Juliana! I love how you shadowed the Christmas story with the details of the animals in the barn (the cows giving milk, the donkey straw, the sheep wool) and also the festival of lights with the 8 kittens, the 8 nights of snow, and the 8 candles in the window. The phrase “ribbon of kittens” is beautiful! And I’m glad that the kittens found a home with the lonely old woman – happiness for everyone 🙂 Thanks so much for joining in the holiday contest fun!

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    • Susanna Leonard Hill at 9:21 PM #

      P.S. – It looks like plenty of people are finding you anyway, but I did just realize your link was broken and fixed it, so hopefully it will work now!

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    • Juliana Lee at 9:43 PM #

      Thank you, Thank you, Susanna! Your word count was a real challenge, but I’m glad I did it! And thank you also for fixing my link to your site. I’ve read all the other stories and I’m just glad I don’t have your job now of choosing the winners! Good Luck!

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  9. megmillerwrites at 3:55 PM #

    Sweet story Juliana! What wonderful imagery, “a ribbon of kittens.” Love it. 🙂

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    • Juliana Lee at 6:22 PM #

      Thank you so much Meg! I can’t wait for ReviMo, I plan on getting to know you much better.

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  10. lindamartinandersen at 11:45 AM #

    Juliana,
    I found you and I’m so glad I did. Your story pulls me in like poetry. Beautiful!

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  11. schriscoe at 3:52 PM #

    This is beautiful! So peaceful and sweet! Well done!

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  12. Kathy at 3:49 PM #

    A magical story! You are very talented. I love the imagery!

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    • Juliana Lee at 3:54 PM #

      Thanks Kathy! Wishing you and John a Merry Christmas in your new home!

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  13. Keila Dawson at 12:06 PM #

    Sweet story! Love the imagery. Good luck in the contest. Merry Christmas!

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  14. Patricia Tilton at 10:29 AM #

    Such beautiful imagery. You surpassed your goal. It still has the feel of a holiday — especially with the 8 candles.

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    • Juliana Lee at 10:50 AM #

      Thanks Pat! Without an illustrator, I was afraid the evergreens, holly, star, and candles might be lost in the story.

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  15. Cathy Ballou Mealey at 8:40 AM #

    Peaceful and lovely!

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  16. Nancy Tandon at 7:36 AM #

    This is really sweet. Nicely done!

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  17. thislittlebirdie at 6:31 AM #

    Lovely story!

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    • Juliana Lee at 9:04 AM #

      Thank you Little Birdie! I hope to get around to reading all the other stories before tomorrow!

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  18. This is the magic of the holidays right there, Juliana!

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  19. MichelleLynn at 1:28 AM #

    Just beautiful, Juliana! You are very talented.

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    • Juliana Lee at 9:02 AM #

      How nice of you to say, Michelle. I liked the Cookies for Papa Noel as well!

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  20. cherylsec at 11:07 PM #

    This is beautiful, Juliana! I love the poetic rhythm and the repetition. It’s such a sweet story. Well done! 🙂

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  21. teresarobeson at 10:57 PM #

    A magical tale…made even nicer with cats! 🙂

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  22. Jane R Cooper at 9:58 PM #

    Wished I was an illustrator!

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  23. Cindy Schrauben at 9:49 PM #

    Beautiful!

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